How many times will you look at the blue sky
before you forget to notice it?
At what point will you say you are satisfied
with seeing enough full moons?
Does that tree that you walk by every day
still have the most stunning green?
Does its towering presence still humble you?
You have an imagination
that has built castles in your childhood...
What do you build now, Dreamer?
From a cry you now speak...
What have you to say, Friend?
You are someone with a story
and you are the hero in every one of them.
You are the blue sky and full moon!
you have forgotten to recognize
Your existence and presence to yourself
is like that tree you know and love
Awake, Dreamer! Speak, Friend!
Copyright ©2004 J. R. Hollyday
before you forget to notice it?
At what point will you say you are satisfied
with seeing enough full moons?
Does that tree that you walk by every day
still have the most stunning green?
Does its towering presence still humble you?
You have an imagination
that has built castles in your childhood...
What do you build now, Dreamer?
From a cry you now speak...
What have you to say, Friend?
You are someone with a story
and you are the hero in every one of them.
You are the blue sky and full moon!
you have forgotten to recognize
Your existence and presence to yourself
is like that tree you know and love
Awake, Dreamer! Speak, Friend!
Copyright ©2004 J. R. Hollyday
Your beautiful poem is a swift and inspiring kick in the butt! More please....
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ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing that with us! My self worth just jumped 22.6 %. I want more. That was a great poem, very well structured and the imaging was excellent. I pat you on the back with my right hand and can now pat myself on my back with my left one!
ReplyDeleteFirst off I would like to say you are drop dead gorgeous!!! I seen your pic and really like them. Well I'll stop now before I scare the shit out of you.LOL Just wanted to let you know that youre very pretty.
ReplyDeletewow loved this poem it made me think of all i take for granted i dont really understand if that was the intention but that is how it affected me
ReplyDeleteDamn good stuff. I love the topic. It is exactly the way I think. I think people are too often caught up in their lives to notice life. You nailed it. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteI really love this poem. It brings sights into my brain that cause me pain and yet I want to see them again as a man. They were there when I was in torn jeans and straw hat. They were there when my first love took my hand and pulled me into the barn. She is still there in my heart and I wonder where she went in so short a time. It was yesterday that I kissed her under that big elm tree. Now she is far from me. This is the kind of vissions you caused to be conjured up and I thank you. You still need to work on your punctuation (e.g. "You are the blue sky and full moon!" would be a nice place to express an exclamation, wouldn't it?
ReplyDeleteIncredible, your prose is vivid and alive, I would see each live as if you were projecting it into the back of my head. You have written lines that I am actually jealous of (why you *shakes fist* :) ) and am moved by, I think my favourite line has to be "what do you build now, Dreamer?" the power (emotionally, and philosophically) in this one line is overwhelming. Have you guessed I love your poem; I thank you for asking
ReplyDeleteThe Buddhist nature of your poem provides great subject matter. Intriguing yet simple. The words speak to the reader(me), makes it feel very personal...like it was made for me...The stuff of great poetry.
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely and very thoughtful poem. Too often we forget to notice the sheer beauty that surrounds us. You have captured that sentiment in a beautifully-flowing way. It is very well-structured and and insightful. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteIn a world where everyone's too busy to stop and smell the proverbial roses, you come to tell them that they should. I agree. I live my life by it. This poem is so good, I fell in love with you. I loved every part of it. It's non-rhyming scheme was key, and the dreamer coating was so tech!
ReplyDeleteWhat amazing questions you have asked in this poem, amazing depth and meaning - loved it!! You have intelligently and clearly set out the idea you wish to convey within this poem - a great work of poetry.
ReplyDeleteinspirational!!!
ReplyDeleteyou are the sky and full moon...now its time for readers to say you are to be recognized as yet another poet.
great job my friend. you leave me like a baby counting pebbles on the shore!
This was written during the early part of winter 2004 after nearly a dozen of my closest friends have moved away from Los Angeles and my teaching practice had hit an all time low. I wrote this to encourage myself and generate my thinking to exist positively for the future yet to come
ReplyDeleteWOW!! That was truly an awesome piece of writing. I liked all the questions and the imagery. This poem is so true!
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