And noticed the shadow of dark thoughts
Where ideas were driven through imaginary boundaries;
The gaze of fear there I caught.
Lively conversation and passionate pretense plotting towards a prize kiss.
Torn between games of positioning reality
To strategize or sacrifice to exist
A position to choose is decidedly denounced
In exchange for the currency of chance
Loose change unpredictably flirts for things unplanned and
Schedules for hopeful romance
Angles of beauty with truth dazzling in distortion
Words unsaid; thoughts stretched out of proportion
Weakness weighed in wishful notions
Expecting Love to answer the call of your devotion
Enslaved, enchanted, empowered
Do I hear the voice of a king or coward?
Copyright ©2005 J. R. Hollyday
This is a fine poem that you have written. you have a good word flow and it was a pleasure as always.
ReplyDeleteThis is the first of your poems that I've reviewed. I love the way your words dance about your work . Almost as if they create by themselves. Very interesting.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this poem. It makes you feel involved in the poems’ story and displays how very well written it is. It has great, vivid imagery and is easy to understand. Definitely a good read.
ReplyDelete"Do I hear the voice of a king or a coward?"I loved that line,and I wonder the same thing at times. . Will they take the risk? or be the coward forever? or better yet, pass up on the opportunity of you?I really enjoyed reading this poem, well done:)
ReplyDeleteAmazing wording ability really comes forth in this poem. I can see a great amount of talent in your work. Keep it up
ReplyDeleteThis poem was simple, yet elegant. The verses flowed smoothly and your imagery was perfection.
ReplyDeleteI love your words, your expressions,and your wonder. And your knowledge of knowing there are truths and there are lies which come hand in hand......may you remain and stand in grace, so love one day might place the king's voice as planned, in your hand.
ReplyDeleteYour rhymning is great and you have a message in this piece. Your last two lines in this piece are very powerful. This is a must read to all poets.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like a sad love poem and you were disappointed. Maybe you should keep looking for someone different. Yes? Henzler
ReplyDeleteVery nice poem, good rhyme scheme. Wouldn't it be nice if everything stay as innocent as when we were children. Sometimes being an adult can be complicated, but it can also be that way for the children now to.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Doug
I enjoyed your use of language, rich and interesting to read. A "place" we have all been, but few can describe it so well.
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